Thursday, November 20, 2008

Peace (1st Draft)

What about peace?
Is it war?
Is it crime?
Is it hate?

No
Peace is loving,
peace is kind.
Peace is caring, and
peace is never blind.

Peace sees everything,
never turning its back.
It can resolve any issue,
and fix any problem.

Peace is the power,
the solution to change.
Growing in all who spread it.

Be peace,
embody it and live it.
Love it and share it.

That's peace,
that's what it's about.

1 comment:

Ms. Wiesner said...

Your first stanza is unnecessary. We already know peace is not those things.

The second stanza is cliche.

I like the idea of personifying peace.

Work on your diction. Use a more mature vocabulary.