Tuesday, October 21, 2008

Bob's Day at Camp

“Hi, my name is Bob,” the little boy said as he walked into his first day of camp. It was a bright and sunny day, a perfect day for the first day of camp. The camp instructor, Ms. May, then asked all the kids to step up one at a time and tell every one their name and age. Each child then did as she said, standing up one at a time saying hi, their name, and then their age with a hand held up with five fingers indicating that they were all five years old. After all the campers had introduced themselves Ms. May told them that it was time for the first activity of the day. It was time for art.

All the campers cheered as they skipped off to the art building. As they walked up the, what were to them, huge stairs they entered the coolest building in the whole camp. The art building was brightly painted and had materials for any project you could imagine. The most striking feature of the art room was it’s ceiling, which was painted to look like a Starry Night. Bob had seen this painting many times before and it was his very favorite. What he liked most about this version was the way the lights on the ceiling were placed in the center of the stars, which gave the stars a more realistic illumination. The campers were instructed to pick a table to sit at with three other kids. The tables were all shaped like paint pallets and had paint brush legs. He was so excited, he just couldn’t wait to get stared with their art project.

Today the campers were going to make macaroni necklaces. This was a favorite among all the campers including Bob. They were all given a bole full of macaroni, some paint and string. Each camper then proceeded to take a piece of smooth macaroni and paint in their favorite color. When the little jewelers finished their fine pieces of jewelry, they moved on to their next activity.

It was now time for fun and games out side. He couldn’t wait to run and play with all of his new camp buddies. The activity for today was an obstacle course. It consisted of a tunnel that they crawl through; followed by a ball pit they had to swim through, after that there was a maze, and then finally a small rock wall that they had to climb over to get to the finish line. Ms. May told them the instructions, “Okay kids let’s split into two groups of six and then we will have a race through the obstacle course. Which ever team gets to the finish line first wins.” He was so excited to go through the obstacle course with his team. Another boy on his team named Tommy, whispered to him, “Hey Bob, I hope we win. Do you think the team that wins will get a prize?” Bob then whispered back, “I hope we win too! That would be fun.” Just as they finished whispering to each other, Ms. May said, “Ready, set, go!” The race began and they were off. They darted through the course and were at the end in no time. It was a tie! Both teams won and everyone was happy. They all cheered and jumped around like a bunch of chimpanzees.

The first day of camp was coming to an end and every one had had a great day. All the campers got there art and then went to pick up area to wait for their parents. Bob thought about all the fun he had that day and he couldn’t wait to tell his mom. The most important thing that he was thinking about was how he couldn’t wait to eat the lunch that was waiting at home for him.

1 comment:

Ms. Wiesner said...

You don't need the "then" here,"Each child then did as she said"

Don't need the "had" here: "After all the campers had introduced themselves ..."

Good details: "As they walked up the, what were to them, huge stairs they entered the coolest building in the whole camp."

Watch your verb tense.

Wrong there/their/they're, "All the campers got there art and..."

Good descriptors, but I don't feel like I really understand this little kids.